RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: Odyssey - beansworth - Jan. 12, 2022
(Jan. 12, 2022 3:11 AM)PikaBeyblade Wrote: Hope you do well on your exams Thanks! I'm going to try my hardest, because as this marking period is coming to a close, the exams are drawing in, and basically this friday till next friday, are days with a MP(Marking Period for short) Exam, I'll probably try and get the next two chapters out before then, and then with exam week, I'll probably only get one out
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: Odyssey - beansworth - Jan. 13, 2022
I think I'll be posting Chapter 19 tonight! My English and Biology Exams are on Friday so, Friday is a harder day to post. Anyway, I'll try and post 19 with all the ocs tonight.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: Odyssey - PikaBeyblade - Jan. 13, 2022
Great job beansworth
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: Odyssey - PikaBeyblade - Jan. 14, 2022
I don’t mean to be impatient but when are you going to post Chapter 19
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: Odyssey - beansworth - Jan. 14, 2022
(Jan. 14, 2022 3:48 AM)PikaBeyblade Wrote: I don’t mean to be impatient but when are you going to post Chapter 19 I'm working on it right now, I'd hope to get it up tomorrow but that all depends on how much time I get to work on it. It all really depends on how much free time, I have during High School, then after school depends, and with my Exams tomorrow, I don't know exactly, but I really want to get it up for everyone to read, because it's been a little ow since my last chapter post.
TL;DR-Should be out tomorrow
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: Odyssey - Hollowmind13 - Jan. 14, 2022
(Jan. 14, 2022 6:01 AM)beansworth Wrote: (Jan. 14, 2022 3:48 AM)PikaBeyblade Wrote: I don’t mean to be impatient but when are you going to post Chapter 19 I'm working on it right now, I'd hope to get it up tomorrow but that all depends on how much time I get to work on it. It all really depends on how much free time, I have during High School, then after school depends, and with my Exams tomorrow, I don't know exactly, but I really want to get it up for everyone to read, because it's been a little ow since my last chapter post.
TL;DR-Should be out tomorrow .
I'd recommend writing on free weekends, with the exception of weekend before tests/exams (studying is important) and busy weekends like a family birthday party or something.
Also, not like the upload schedule really matters.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: Odyssey - beansworth - Jan. 14, 2022
I think Chapter 19 will be done today.
Chapter 19!!!
Chapter 19: New Challenges! Valhalla!
The next day, Keith and Irene were practicing, and has they practiced, four bladers noticed them.
Keith(Tired): “3! 2! 1! Go Shoot!”
Irene(Tired): “3! 2! 1! Go Shoot!”
{Both Kratos and Ifrit hit the stadium floor, and began barraging each other.}
One of the bladers ran forward, and called out.
???: “Go Shoot!!”
{A three sided bey, landed in the stadium floor, and slammed into Kratos, launching it out of the stadium.}
???(Angry): “My name is Kai, and I use my Mythical Beyblade, Forge Vulcan, it’s attack power is beyond powerful!”
Keith grabbed Kratos and walked over to Kai, and the other three people, who were standing by Kai, walked over and introduced themselves.
A short boy, with Lapis Eyes, and Deep Brown hair, with dark-ish green highlights, spoke up first.
???(Calm): “My name is Barry Robertson, and that’s Vorukatai, he just prefers to go by Kai. My Mythical Beyblade is Revolution Bellerophon.”
He stuck his head out to Keith, and he shook his hand. He then turned to Irene, and she stuck her hand out, and he shook her hand.
Then a taller boy, with pink hair walked up, he was about the same height as Irene.
???: “Hello, I’m Bryan De La Hoya, Free’s younger brother. I fight with my Mythical Beyblade, Criminal Baphomet.”
Bryan swooshed his hair to the side, while the final blader walked forward.
He walked forward, his thick brown hair complemented his hazel eyes, he wore black glasses. He wore a Transformers shirt, and khaki cargo shorts.
???: “I’m Shane Tarkin, I’m super excited to meet you Keith Shadis! My Mythical Beyblade, is the super defense type, Scarred Shisa!”
Keith then looked at Irene and then the four bladers and said.
Keith(Calm): “How about we have two, one on two battles?”
Keith and Irene claimed two stadiums.
Irene(Curious): “How about me versus Shane and Bryan, and Keith versus Barry and Kai.”
Kai ran over and readied Vulcan.
Kai(Somewhat clam): “Come on, so called legend. My hammers are the strongest, that Van kid will lose to Vulcan’s hammer.”
Barry(Irraited): “Can you not want to beat everyone, let’s work together alright?”
Kai(Mad): “Don’t get in my way!”
Everyone: “3! 2! 1! Go Shoot!”
Kratos, Vulcan and Bellerophon landed on the stadium floor, Kratos took center, right before Vulcan slammed into it.
Keith(Shocked): “What, that was huge damage!?”
Kai: “That’s right, so called Legend! Vulcan’s a total attacking beast!”
{Kratos retook center, but Bellerophon began barraging it.}
Barry: “Xtreme Shoot!”
{Bellerophon performed a flower pattern while hitting Kratos, and Keith was getting anxious.}
Kai(Angry): “Hey, let me do something!”
Vulcan shoot towards Kratos, but Bellerophon was in the way, and Vulcan hit Bellerophon bursting it.
Barry(Annoyed): “Are you kidding me, Kai!? Do you really need to battle Keith alone!?”
Kai(Annoyed): “Shut it! If your bey can burst that easy, then your bey isn’t good!”
Keith(Confident): “Now’s the perfect time! Awaken, Kratos!”
{Kratos’ avatar awakened, his axes gleamed, and he got ready to crush Vulcan.}
Keith: “Now Destruction Axe!”
{Kratos, shot of the Xtend+ Driver and launched Vulcan out of the stadium, winning the match.}
Kai(Pissed): “Are you kidding!”
Kai grabbed Vulcan and walked away, looking for his true enemy, Van Aoi, and Fallen Valkyrie.
Everyone: “3! 2! 1! Go Shoot!”
Ifrit, Baphomet, and Shisa hit the stadium floor, and Shisa took center, while Baphomet circled around Shisa, like a vulture to roadkill.
Irene(Hyper): “Now, Wave Shoot!”
{Ifrit shot at Shisa, and began attacking it, but the attacks weren’t making much contact.”
Byran(Calm): “Now, Baphomet! Criminal Impact!”
{Baphomet shot towards Ifrit, and clicked it twice. Ifrit lost some spin, and Baphomet was closing in.}
Irene(Less confident): “Ifrit, we’ll win! Eruption Zone!”
Ifrit began to speed up, and went to attack Shisa.
Shane(Pumped up): “Alright, with my newly completed Driver, we’ll win! Scarred Acceleration!”
{The Statue Driver, unlocked and the top of the driver began to spin the layer, Irene gasped at the sight.}
Ifrit hit Shisa, and was launched out of the stadium, but Irene was quick enough, and caught Ifrit before it hit the ground.
Keith walked over, but before he could say anything his phone began ringing.
The caller’s name popped up, and it was Valt.
Keith answered the call, excitedly.
Keith(Excited): “Hey Valt! What did you call for?”
Valt: “Well me, Free and Shu were talking and decided that if you wanted, you could have your own Blading Team.”
Keith(Hyped): “Really!?”
Valt: “Yeah, if you could tell me a name, and maybe 4 members, that would be a good start.”
Keith: “The name will be Valhalla, where fallen warriors go to have a feast before going to Heaven, and I would like Baki Alcazaba, Irene Mao, Lucy Kurenai, Samson Bernadotte and Yuito Kuroda, as my members, and could our home base, be the Kantou Region, about 50 minutes from Baki’s House?”
Valt: “Sure thought this through, I’ll get right too it. In about a week’s time, we’ll begin work on your team’s headquarters.”
Keith(Thankful): “Thanks so much, Valt!”
Valt ended the call, and walked over to Shu and Free, who where sitting at the T.V
Shu: “Hey Valt, isn’t Sisco, a squad captain of B.C Sol now?”
Valt: “Yeah, he’s Squad B’s Captain, and Free’s Squad A’s.”
Sisco and his daughter, Satsuka were on the T.V in the duo’s tournament going on in Brazil, they were battling a new blader named Neusa, and her partner.
Shu and Free got up, and they began calling the W.B.A to get Keith’s team set up.
After everything, Keith and Irene returned to Baki’s Mansion, and the other three bladers went to their houses, asking if they could have another battle soon.
Keith entered the Living Room, and turned a movie on, sitting with Irene, and eventually falling asleep.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: Odyssey - PikaBeyblade - Jan. 14, 2022
Nice introductions beansworth
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: Odyssey - beansworth - Jan. 14, 2022
(Jan. 14, 2022 6:50 PM)PikaBeyblade Wrote: Nice introductions beansworth Thanks, I hope I introed everyone's ocs right!
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: Odyssey - Scorponok - Jan. 14, 2022
Oh goodness! Shane was so cool! And he actually won against a main character! That’s fantastic! I can’t wait to see scarred shisa awaken.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: Odyssey - beansworth - Jan. 14, 2022
(Jan. 14, 2022 7:19 PM)Scorponok Wrote: Oh goodness! Shane was so cool! And he actually won against a main character! That’s fantastic! I can’t wait to see scarred shisa awaken. I plan to make Shane and Shisa seem like a unbeatable team, I think he'll only be beaten later.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: Odyssey - Carma___bigbang - Jan. 14, 2022
I didn’t like it I LOVED IT
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: Odyssey - PikaBeyblade - Jan. 14, 2022
It seems like Barry and Kai’s disagreements may foreshadow them being on opposing sides(Barry on Keith’s side and Kai on Van’s side)
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: Odyssey - beansworth - Jan. 14, 2022
(Jan. 14, 2022 10:21 PM)PikaBeyblade Wrote: It seems like Barry and Kai’s disagreements may foreshadow them being on opposing sides(Barry on Keith’s side and Kai on Van’s side) Sorta yeah! And I thought that they wouldn't like each other's ideals, with Kai wanting to battle the strongest and not being into teamwork, while Barry wants to battle and have fun, and likes teamwork, but yeah you could say that's foreshadowing.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: Odyssey - PikaBeyblade - Jan. 14, 2022
Because of that maybe Barry might join Valhalla
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: Odyssey - beansworth - Jan. 14, 2022
(Jan. 14, 2022 10:56 PM)PikaBeyblade Wrote: Because of that maybe Barry might join Valhalla I think Barry, Finn(Hollowmind's OC) and Neusa(Speedy's OC) join Valhalla, but the other have chances too!
Also I'll try and get Chapter 20 out soon.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: Odyssey - OverlordLuínor - Jan. 15, 2022
WoW
You did Kai the justice my description couldn’t give it! I love how you portrayed him! That was AWESOME how he attacked his own teammate!
I mean awesome in the sense that he had the nerve to do that, not awesome as in cool.
Guess Kai’s too L33T for teamwork. :p
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: Odyssey - Carma___bigbang - Jan. 15, 2022
Will my oc win any battles?
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: Odyssey - Hollowmind13 - Jan. 15, 2022
(Jan. 15, 2022 8:41 PM)Carma___bigbang Wrote: Will my oc win any battles?
Depends on plot I guess, but probably yeah.
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Btw, I don't mind if Finn enters Vahalla of not beansworth , do whatever you want with him.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: Odyssey - beansworth - Jan. 15, 2022
(Jan. 15, 2022 8:55 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: (Jan. 15, 2022 8:41 PM)Carma___bigbang Wrote: Will my oc win any battles?
Depends on plot I guess, but probably yeah.
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Btw, I don't mind if Finn enters Vahalla of not beansworth , do whatever you want with him. To answer Carma, yes he will, it's just kinda showing the power of Keith or "The Legend"
Alright, I was planning on adding him because he kinda feels like a Cuza and Valt but Keith and Finn to me, so I'll have them on the same team.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: Odyssey - PikaBeyblade - Jan. 16, 2022
So I wonder if Barry will join Valhalla
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: Odyssey - beansworth - Jan. 16, 2022
(Jan. 16, 2022 2:11 AM)PikaBeyblade Wrote: So I wonder if Barry will join Valhalla Most likely because he's would be a good attack and good friend to the team.
Alright Chapter 20! SpeedySuomi this is Neusa's Chapter and next is UnseenBurst's with Perseus aka Percy Nakano
Chapter is in the spoiler as always
Chapter 20: Brazil’s Queen! God of the South Wind!
As Sicso, Satsuka and Neusa’s battled ended, Neusa had left the tournament building. She was about to travel to Japan, and battle Keith Shadis.
She grabbed her suitcases, and jogged onto the plane, her short pink hair, seemed brighter, thanks to Spain’s hot sun, and she had eyeglasses and huge earrings.
The plane departed Spain, and would take about 14 hours to make it to Kantou Region, where Valhalla’s Club house resided.
Keith launched Kratos, he was practicing, because Van and Valt’s title match would happen in three days, and he wanted to be able to fight Van as well.
Keith(To Himself): “If Van beats Valt, I’ll challenge him instantly, and win back the title.”
Baki was on a subway train, heading into the Tohoku, to pick up some supplies to work on the club house. And after exiting the train, he walked out onto the streets and saw two people arguing.
???: “You outsiders need to stop coming to Japan for touring!”
???: “Hey, I asked one question, and I came from Spain to find someone, and most likely stay here in Japan for a while!”
Baki walked over and said.
Baki: “Ma’am, what’s your question?”
She turned and he was captivated by her beauty. Her short pink hair was shining in the sun.
Neusa(Bright): “I wanted to know where Keith Shadis, and I need to battle him with my newly forged Mythical Beyblade.”
Baki: “Oh, he’s actually not blading today, he went on a date.”
Neusa(Sad): “Might as well, go back to Spain.”
Baki: “ But hey, you could battle Valhalla’s Vice-Captain, Baki Alcazaba.”
Neusa(Happy): “Really!? Let’s battle, then!!”
The two entered Baki’s Mansion, and readied their launchers.
Both: “3! 2! 1! Go Shoot!!”
{Bahamut took center, and Notus began lightly hitting Bahamut.}
Baki(Calm): “I’m assuming, you also have a Defense Type?”
Neusa(Annoyed): “I won’t say! Revealing your Beyblade’s Secrets doesn’t make any sense.”
Baki(Mind): “Wow, she’s right. Telling your enemy about your bey, gives them ideas. She’s talented, but not as talented as me!”
Neusa(Excited): “Alright!! Notus, Mistral Gust!”
{Notus, drift on Accessio’s Free-spinning plate, and crashed into Bahamut clicking it twice.}
Baki(Excited): “You’ve messed up! Dynamic Shield!”
{Bahamut transformed and countered Notus, Notus caught itself on the outer ridge, and the Accessio Driver changed.}
Neusa(Hyped): “Notus, the winds guide our every move! Mistral Burst!”
{The metal ring on Accessio dropped, locking up the Free Spinning tip. Then Notus changed courses and began to go to make impact with Bahamut.}
Baki(Surprised): “Your driver! It truly has amazing Defense, and then the tip locks up, and becomes more aggressive!”
Neusa: “A~ribba!! Notus, the wind howls!”
{Notus’ avatar appeared, and huge gusts of wind circled it.}
Neusa: “Now, Mistral Gust!”
Baki: “Counter it, Bahamut! Dynamic Roar!”
{The two beys collided and both weren’t letting up.}
Baki: “Push through Bahamut!”
Neusa: “Notus, we’ll beat him, come on!”
{Both beys shot into the air, and they hit the ground at the same time.}
Baki: “Wow, we’re evenly matched. I never though a Defense Match, would be nearly as fun as this match was!”
Neusa: “That was so fun, Notus, your amazing!”
Neusa stuck her hand out, and shook hands with Baki, then the two went to the nearby café to get some smoothies.
Over in America, a teenager with blonde, messy hair opened his passport and phone.
???: “Yes dad, I’ll be fine. I’ve already bought a Hotel Room, I’ll most likely return in March.”
He closed his phone, and listened for the intercom.
Attendee: “Would Percy Nakano, come to the private desk?”
The boy got up and walked over with his two suitcases.
Attendee: “Hello, Sir Percy. Your private jet is ready.”
Percy entered the plane, and instantly started looking around at everything like a child in a toy store.
Percy(Amazed): “Woah, so this a private jet!? Hey, Mr. Yamamoto, does jet have soda?”
Mr. Yamamoto: “Yep, it’s in the far cooler.”
Percy grabbed a can and opened it, right before the jet took off.
Percy: “I’m coming, Keith Shadis, I’ll beat you with my Mythical Bey. Our bond is unbreakable right, Poseidon?”
Percy had Poseidon in his hand, and it glew, showing their bond.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: Odyssey - Carma___bigbang - Jan. 16, 2022
I have a episode idea you don’t have to use it but you can -
Episode ???-Olypian match, battle of the gods
(hades zues and posiden in a match)
(Dec. 25, 2021 8:48 PM)beansworth Wrote: (Dec. 25, 2021 7:15 PM)Carma___bigbang Wrote: No more beast Bryan ok Sorry but, due to what I have so far Beast is in and Bryan can't be added due to Free not being with Kristina and Kristina already being with another guy and they already have a son. Sorry but I can't add Bryan due to how the story is set up.
I was checking past comments and thought about this one
He can be free’s son
Free could’ve married Kristina before she married the other dude and they had a child
So Kristina’s new son could be Bryans stepbrother
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: Odyssey - Hollowmind13 - Jan. 16, 2022
(Jan. 16, 2022 3:46 PM)Carma___bigbang Wrote: I have a episode idea you don’t have to use it but you can -
Episode ???-Olypian match, battle of the gods
(hades zues and posiden in a match)
(Dec. 25, 2021 8:48 PM)beansworth Wrote: Sorry but, due to what I have so far Beast is in and Bryan can't be added due to Free not being with Kristina and Kristina already being with another guy and they already have a son. Sorry but I can't add Bryan due to how the story is set up.
I was checking past comments and thought about this one
He can be free’s son
Free could’ve married Kristina before she married the other dude and they had a child
So Kristina’s new son could be Bryans stepbrother :)
Maybe just make Bryan be adopted by Free? Free could be a single dad or something. Makes less drama and it is more easy to add him.
Just a suggestion if Barry does get added.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Mystical and Beyblade Burst: Odyssey - Scorponok - Jan. 16, 2022
(Jan. 14, 2022 7:43 PM)beansworth Wrote: (Jan. 14, 2022 7:19 PM)Scorponok Wrote: Oh goodness! Shane was so cool! And he actually won against a main character! That’s fantastic! I can’t wait to see scarred shisa awaken. I plan to make Shane and Shisa seem like a unbeatable team, I think he'll only be beaten later. Thanks, that really nice of you to make my oc an important character! I wonder, is he gonna be a character who seems super cool for a while, but then gets outclassed and the protagonist wins every time after that, or will he be kinda like delta, with Keith beating him sometimes, and Shane winning other times. It doesn’t matter though, this is YOUR story, you get to do whatever you want with it, I’m just lucky to have Shane included.
Also, if you don’t want to say for plot reasons, that’s fine. Remember not to let your fan base boss you around!
I also can’t wait to see shisa awaken. Once again props to your writing.
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