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(Story) Beyblade: The Relief of Living - Printable Version

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(Story) Beyblade: The Relief of Living - kaihiwatari5673 - Jan. 12, 2013

This is my next story, enjoy:

Prologue:
Chapter 1: Relief



RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Relief of Living - Dual - Jan. 12, 2013

I saw a lot of grammar mistakes but the storyline is pretty good. Keep it up!


RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Relief of Living - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Jan. 12, 2013

Many grammar mistakes, otherwise good story line.
And is it me or did the whole grouping so many sentances in one paragraph mess me up.
It should be like this:

"Hey!" Sam exclaimed.
"Hey man!" Ted replied.

I hope this helps.
Good luck!


RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Relief of Living - kaihiwatari5673 - Jan. 12, 2013

I will take these under consideration. Thank you for the advice.